as he rested there slain his outer appearance grotesque
and his rank in the war lost
there I stood relieved
he was the great general Elie and I his envious brother
i never understood why he was chosen
i was just as strong and mighty if not more
father told me to be content with my title
and label as a great soldier
and when the enemy sprung out
i trembled
Elie did anything but
as he shielded me from the attacker
it was then that I was swamped
with relief and grief
a rare cocktail of emotion
i could not ever repay Elie
this occurrence did not stop me
from my craving of the jeweled sword
Elie’s pride and joy
that characterized him as a general
presently it is I who is general by default
my title has changed
though I haven’t earned this position I am never the less deserving of it
for reasons of the unknown
I am chabad and there is a holy book called ”The Igros” that is an important item of our sect of Judiasm. It consists of letters written by the previous Lubavitch Rebbe- (the leader of our sect who passed away)Rabbi Shneerson. To get to the point I asked for an answer from one of the vast amount of letters and got an answer that has to do with sibling rivalry..this poem was inspired by it! enjoy!
Amber is the Color of Her Energy 
tinkwelborn
November 16, 2011 at 2:20 am
this is a nice moving piece with very rich texture (emotionally). this is the stuff which drive men to the scotch bottle. you’ve done a good characterization piece here – showing by the thoughts.
chanzibrenner
November 16, 2011 at 3:06 am
thank you so very much! its so nice to have people appreciate my thoughts..this is my first time blogging and was sort of skeptical to share my work with strangers but i really like it now..looking forward to discussing more poetry with you!
Pat Hatt
November 16, 2011 at 4:04 am
Wow you really captured all the feelings and portrayed them brilliantly, nicely done! And first time blogging you say? Sure there will be many more on the way.
chanzibrenner
November 16, 2011 at 4:26 am
thank you so much..yes its my first time blogging other then posting them on facebook..yes i have many more that i will be posting slowly
Voyages Vistas Vino
November 19, 2011 at 6:36 pm
A good read and the addition of the inspiration for this ode gave the poem more depth.
Cheers,
Mark Butkus
Hema
November 21, 2011 at 12:47 pm
Those are such nice and honest words woven by you, general!
chanzibrenner
November 21, 2011 at 7:23 pm
thanx!!